Wordiness Worksheet 1

Wordiness Worksheet 1

Wordiness basically means using more words, phrases, or sentences than are absolutely necessary. This can be distracting, so you should strive for a more efficient use of words and descriptions. Rewrite the following, eliminating extra words and combining short sentences into longer ones when necessary.

The first person that I met at the party was Cindy. Cindy was a blonde who had bright green eyes.
The woman who was keeping score made a mistake.
The trail that I followed led to a boulder that was perched on the edge of a cliff.
Aluminium is a metal that is very light in weight.
The office manager wanted all the memos to be typed. She wanted all the memos to be typed so that they would be easy to read.
I spent two years in Tucson. Tucson is my favorite city.
The license plate that was on the car had a word on it instead of numbers. The word was “rodeo.”
The book that the library wants me to return is called For Whom The Bell Tolls.
She flew to Hawaii on a 747. The 747 is the biggest airliner in the world.
All the cigars that he smoked made the room smell like it was a tobacco factory.

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